Friday 21 August 2015

hide and seek poem


i see him hide in the .the  bush breathes out cold air, he  gets colder ever minter it breathes the cold air  .he hear i the seek yell read or not here i come. his heart beat beats  fast as he  hears the seeker  come closer  shivering with colds nis .the seeker runs to find more. he dash as fast as he can and got a worm blank he went back to his  hiding spot he comes out his legs are so sore  he get up and see the star watching him it's gloom night

1 comment:

  1. HI Summer Oliver here I really like your writing that you did but maybe you should work on your capital letters and full spots but I did like that you used heaps of describing words in your writing

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